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The bar chart shows the percentage of government spending on road and transport (1990 - 2005). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of government spending on road and transport (1990 - 2005). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of the government expenditure on road and transport in Italy, Portugal,
United
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 Kingdom and the USA in four years.
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, Portugal and Italy showed the highest percentage of spending on the development of transport systems,
the
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while the
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 United Kingdom and the USA
were
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showed
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 the lowest proportion over the
period
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 given.
Initially
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, Portugal spent over 25% on transport structure in 1990
,
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;
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 it steadily declined in the remaining
period
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.The expenditure in Italy was over 20% in the first year and fluctuated slightly over the next three years. In terms of
,
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 the UK displayed a much lower percentage
at
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of
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 10% in 1990,
it
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and it
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 showed slight changes during the remaining
period
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However
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, the percentage of spending in the USA started at approximately 11% in the first year and slightly dropped to 10% after five years,
it
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and it
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 steadily rose by the end of the
period
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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