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Writing Samples
Band 2

Some people think that the inteernet has brought people closer togethert while others that people and communities are bbecome more isolated. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

There is no doubt that these days
of
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people
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 have different
think
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taht
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than
 the
inteernet
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internet
.
This
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 essay will discuss whether the internet
happen to
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brings
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people
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 closer together or communities
are
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become more isolated. In terms of the first point, the
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internt
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internet
become
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has become
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 significant in the world. The main reason given to support
this
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 claim is that we
not
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are not
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 with
internet
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the internet
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.
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,
everyday
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every day
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call
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I call
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 my family with my
fhone
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phone
 on Snapchat.
In other words
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, many
people
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use
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internt
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internet
 as
communiction
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communication
 with friends, family and
somtimes
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sometimes
 for work.
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, many
people
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become
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do not
out
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in
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 the home.
This
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 is because
the
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they
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use
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 a mistake the internet.
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Also
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 there
is
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are
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people
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use
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who use
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 the
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internt
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internet
 time along that
he
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which
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 causes a lot of
disadvantegs
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disadvantages
. To illustrate, A study conducted in 2022 by Oxford University showed that over 70% of
people
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use
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the internt
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internt
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internet
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for along
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along
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a long
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 time become crazy or
they become
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develop
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love
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a love
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 of sitting alone. In conclusion,
although
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 the
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internt
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internet
 causes a lot
harmful
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of harm
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.
Therefore
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, I think
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use
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using
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the internt
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internt
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internet
help
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helps
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of
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apply
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more in
the
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our
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live
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lives
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 and
not we can
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we cannot
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 live without
.
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it.
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grammar
Improve grammar and spelling. For example, 'internt' should be 'internet', 'think' should be 'think differently'. Fix these mistakes to make the essay clearer.
structure
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea. Start with a topic sentence for each paragraph to guide the reader.
content
Add more examples that are clearly explained to support your points. For instance, instead of 'crazy', describe specific feelings or effects of internet use.
content
The essay presents both sides of the argument, which is a good approach to this type of question.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • facilitated
  • connection
  • geographical barriers
  • social media platforms
  • sense of belonging
  • diverse perspectives
  • collaborate
  • share knowledge
  • excessive use
  • social isolation
  • face-to-face interaction
  • addicted
  • disconnection
  • physical surroundings
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • withdraw
  • false sense of connection
  • superficial relationships
  • polarization
  • echo chambers
  • balance
  • benefits
  • drawbacks
  • foster
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