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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. I'm

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Newport city centre from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. I'm
The line chart
illustates
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illustrates
 the
trend
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 of the three
disticnt
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distinct
areas of
crime
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 in Newport city centre during the period between 2003 to 2012.
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, the
crime
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 of
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burglary
burgiary
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 had
the
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a
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 significant
decrase
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decrease
trend
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, during
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. During
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 the ten years, the frequency of the
crimes
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 decreased
more
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by more
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 than two times. The
cirme
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crime
 of
the Roberry
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robbery is
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 always
be
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the minority one, with the lowest frequency.
in
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 detail, from
the
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2003,the
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burgiary
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burglary
 was the most
frequency
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frequent
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cirme
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crime
 in the three
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crimes area
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crime areas
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, and the
car
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 theft
follwing
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followed
 by
.
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apply
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 the robbery rates
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were quit
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quit
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quite
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 lower than
thoes
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those
.
and
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 before
the
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2007, the
rank
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rate
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 of
crimes
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 did not
chanege
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change
, but the
car
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 theft
rate
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 had
the
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a
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continuace
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continuous
decrease
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decreasing
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trend
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 from 2024.
and
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the onther
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onther
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other
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crimes
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crime
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rate
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 was
flactuated
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fluctuated
.
in
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In
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 2007, the
crime
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car
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thetf
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theft
 frequencies over the
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burgiary
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burglary
beacom to
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became
 the highest in highest
one
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apply
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among the three types of
crime
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.
between
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the
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apply
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2007 to 2012, the
rate
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 of
th cirme
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the crime
 of
the
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apply
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burgiary
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burglary
 and
the
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apply
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robbery
were
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remained
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flatuated
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flat
, with
the
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a
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 slight change.
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in
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 contrast, the
crime
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rate
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 of
the
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apply
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car
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 theft had
the
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an
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 escalating
trend
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words trend, crime, burgiary, crimes, car, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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