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The maps show a present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment

The maps show a present layout of an office building and plans for its future redevelopment
The maps illustrate the
office
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’s future redesign and changes.
Overall
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, the
office
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 is predicted not to undergo expansion.
However
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, it is projected to have major changes and reconstructions. In detail, the grass on the
two
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 sides is anticipated to be converted into several areas. One major place
that is
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 going to be built is the outdoor seating
area
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. At the bottom of the seating
area
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, chairs are anticipated to be placed. On the other side,
instead
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 of simple grass, WCs will be built in the northeast corner. Near the WCs, a coffee machine is going to be placed.
Additionally
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, on
another
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the other
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 side, a number of chairs will be placed at the bottom of the building. A meeting
area
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 will be set between the coffee machine and the chairs. The kitchen and canteen will be transformed into
two
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office
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 rooms. The storeroom is predicted to remain unchanged. The four
office
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 rooms are going to be joined together and separated into
two
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office
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 workplaces.
Due to
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 the change in the placement of rooms, the entrance is planned to be relocated to the
center
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centre
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 of the
two
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 offices.
Entrance
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The entrance
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 which leads to
grassy
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the grassy
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area
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 is forecasted to remain.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words office, two, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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