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The internet has changed the world and how people live. Some people think it is great while other people think it causes problems. Give the advantages and disadvantages of the internet

The world today is very
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different
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especially
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internet
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changed
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people
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people's
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life
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.
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addition
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 the
internet
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 has great
infloanes
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influence
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people
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people's
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life
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lives
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 and
changet
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changes
, like how they live .
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 online has a big
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 in
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people
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people's
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inverment
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investment
.
This
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internet
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internet
 has both pros and cons in
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people
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people's
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life
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.
First,
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one of the best advantages is to look for information .
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, they can use it to search for
top
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topics related
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 to their project and solve their
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assignment
or homework .
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 well as,
people
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 can look for
a
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tickets to
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the cinema
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 or to book a
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ticket
 to travel .
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they can spend their free time
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scrolling
 in
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social media
.
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, children can
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watch either
tiktok
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TikTok
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 or
youteub
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YouTube
video
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videos
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 to have fun
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addition
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most
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of
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kids
went
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 to spend time so
the
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 time can move .
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Furthermore
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student
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students
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 have online courses to study at home
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addition
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studying
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 from home can be useful and good for
people
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 who do not have money to rent a car .
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,
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internet
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the internet
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have
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 so many disadvantages
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.one
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One
 of them is
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people
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that people
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 can be addicted to it .
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,
addition
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 can cause
anger
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behavior
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behaviour
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 and bad
habets
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habits
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effect
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affects
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people's
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life
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lives
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, children can learn bad
behavior
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behaviour
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 and in some
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 they will
sfer
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suffer
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bolead
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behaviour
.
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,most
of
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people
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video
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videos
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from
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on
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internet
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be
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 addicted .
Whereas
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,
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internet
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the internet
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 can be used
at
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 the right way by
parent
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parents
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 watching the things that kids watch. In
concluion
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conclusion
, there is no denying the fact that online is useful and it can change
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people
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people's
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life
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lives
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to
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good way
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However
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however
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 some
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disadvantages
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 like using it to study and more .

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coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas more clearly. Use paragraphs to separate advantages and disadvantages. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea.
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Make sure to write complete sentences. Avoid spelling mistakes as they can make your message unclear.
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Give more examples to support your points. It's good to explain why something is an advantage or a disadvantage.
task achievement
You identified both advantages and disadvantages of the internet, which is a good approach.
coherence and cohesion
Your introduction gives an idea of what the essay will be about.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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