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in some countries , owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people why might this be the case? do you think this is a positive or negetive situation

Comare
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Compared
 to home renting,
house
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owing
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owning
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 is quite important for individuals in certain countries. Because the
increasing
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increase
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of
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in
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 the
value
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 of the properties
make
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makes
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 the
owner
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 rich.
but
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But
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 the tenant can not gain any income from
this
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. I believe it is positive for the
owner
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 and
also
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 good for society. Many people
rent
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house
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a house
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in
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for
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 their entire life because it is more affordable and the flexibility. They are able to search
their
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for their
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desire
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desired
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 home online recently
and
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, and
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 the cheaper price is the most important advantage of renting.
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, a college student could easily find a condo for
renting
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rent
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 in the downtown area once they are hired. At the moment, they can not afford the down payment to
owing
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own
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 the place where they live. For
a
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the
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 short term, it is acceptable
but
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, but
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 it is not a good idea
for
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in
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a
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the
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 long run because they help the
owner
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 to keep the condo by paying
rent
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.
However
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,
instead
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 of renting, if the people have a chance to sign a mortgage contract with
bank
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a bank
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 which
allowed
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allows
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 them
buy
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to buy
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 a
house
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. The whole story has been changed completely. Because it
is
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has
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 become an investment
of
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in
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real
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a real
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 estate project to be the
owner
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. The
value
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 of the property increases
along with
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boost
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a boost
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of
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in
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 the land
value
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. The increased part of
money
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the money
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 will be gained income when
they
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the
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 sale
the
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of the
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house
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.
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, a man bought an
appartment
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apartment
 and put it on
rent
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 for 10 years. The tenant
pay
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pays
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 the
rent
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 to him for helping him to pay the monthly mortgage,
then
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 the
owner
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sale
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sells
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 the condo after 10 years to withdraw the downpayment and the increased
value
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 of the place. It is positive for both the
owner
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 and the country. Because the
owner
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 received financial rewards by
owing
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owning
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 the
house
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. and it is a sign of healthy development of
economy
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the economy
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, which is important for the
governement
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government
. In conclusion, I always support
to own
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owning
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 a
house
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 rather than
to
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renting
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rent
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 one because
of
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apply
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the financial advantage
outweight
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outweighs
 the other disadvantages.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to keep your sentences simple and clear. Each paragraph should have one main idea. This helps the reader understand your points better.
task achievement
Try to give more specific reasons for your opinions. This will make your argument stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words to connect your ideas better. Phrases like 'firstly,' 'for example,' and 'in addition' can help improve the flow of your essay.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion about owning a home versus renting one, which is great!
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You included examples to support your ideas, which is helpful in explaining your points.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of security
  • financial investment
  • transient
  • appreciates
  • 'wasted' expense
  • cultural and societal norms
  • symbol of success
  • milestone
  • adulthood
  • control and freedom
  • modifications
  • landlord restrictions
  • generational wealth
  • inheritance
  • financial planning
  • community stability
  • value appreciation
  • financial strain
  • property maintenance
  • economic sectors
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