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The line graph illustrates the average carbon dioxide emissions per capita in four countries — the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal — over a 40-year period from 1967 to 2007.

The line graph illustrates the average carbon dioxide emissions per capita in four countries — the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal — over a 40-year period from 1967 to 2007.
The line graph illustrates the average carbon dioxide
emissions
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 per capita in four countries — the United Kingdom,
Sweden
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, Italy, and Portugal — over a 40-year period from 1967 to 2007.
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, the
UK
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 and
Sweden
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 experienced a downward trend in individual CO2
emissions
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,
while
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 Italy and Portugal showed a significant increase. Despite these changes, the
UK
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 consistently remained the country with the highest
emissions
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 per person throughout the period. In 1967, the
UK
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 had the highest level of CO2
emissions
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, at around 11 metric
tonnes
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 per person.
This
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 figure remained stable until the mid-1970s, after which it began to decline steadily, reaching approximately 9
tonnes
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 by 2007.
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,
Sweden
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 started at about 9
tonnes
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 per capita, peaked slightly in the 1970s, and
then
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 declined sharply to around 5
tonnes
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 by the end of the period.
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, Italy and Portugal saw rising trends. Italy’s
emissions
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 rose gradually from just over 4
tonnes
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 in 1967 to around 8
tonnes
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 in 2007, showing a steady upward trajectory. Portugal had the lowest
emissions
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 at the beginning, with roughly 1.5
tonnes
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 per person, but
this
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 figure climbed significantly to just over 5
tonnes
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 by 2007, surpassing
Sweden
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. In summary,
while
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 the
UK
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 and
Sweden
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 managed to reduce their per-person CO2
emissions
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 over the four decades, Italy and Portugal saw substantial growth in
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 regard.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, sweden, uk, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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