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Band 3.5

You recently Stayed at your friends Place to look after the house while he/she is away. You accidentally damaged something in his/her house. write a letter to feed friend In your letter you should : •Describe what the accident was •explain when it happened •Suggest how the damage can be fixed

Dear Aman, I am writing
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for
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the
apologize
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apologise
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of
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 the damage
,
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I
did
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caused
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at
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to
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 your house
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while
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during
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 my stay. As you are on your business trip, and
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 was my sole responsibility to take care of everything
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but Unfortunately
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unfortunately
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, I broke the vegetable chopper and really feel bad . Yesterday, around 2:00
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PM
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Pm
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 I was preparing the veggies for pasta, and when
i
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finish
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 the chopping , accidentally, the chopper fell down on the floor and broke into
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. Of Course ,
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 damage can be
fix
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 by your response. If you
want
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 either I can transfer you the money for
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 loss or buy you a new chopper.
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 is totally
upto
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 you and just let me know
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 suits you. Hope to hear back from you soon. Divya.

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tone
Try to use a more formal tone since this is a letter to a friend about an accident. Expressing your feelings more clearly can help.
content
Consider adding a brief sentence acknowledging your friend's trust in you and how important it was for you to take care of their home.
coherence
Make sure your paragraphs have only one main idea to help the reader follow your message clearly.
strength
You explained what the accident was clearly.
strength
You offered options for how to fix the damage, showing responsibility.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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