the two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors contribution to the economy of turkey in 2000 and 2016

the two pie charts below show the percentages of industry sectors contribution to the economy of turkey in 2000 and 2016
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The two pie charts give information about the rates of industry segment contribution share to the
turkish
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Turkish
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economy in 2000 and 2016.
Overall
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, at the
beginning
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beginning,
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Agriculture made up the highest contribution to the economy
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of turkey
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turkey
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Turkey
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,
while
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Construction was the
sallest
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smallest
part. In comparison,
at the
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end
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end,
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Healthcare and Education
was
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were
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the largest economic
sector
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sectors
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.
Moreover
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, the lowest was made by Finance, Business and other. In 2000, Construction was 3% of
turkey
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Turkey's
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economic
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economy
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, and increased gradually to 10 per
cent
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in 2016. Trade,
Utilies
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Utilities
and Transportation accounted for 14% in 2000, was grew by 2% in 2016. At the beginning of the period, Manufacturing and Finance, Business and other
compromised
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sectors accounted
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to
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for
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8% and 5 per
cent
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of
turkey’s
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Turkey’s
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economy respectively
and
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, and
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the figures rose moderately to 12% and 8% in 2016. In 2000, Agriculture accounted for 24% of
turkey
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Turkey's
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economic
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economy
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, and decreased slowly to 14% in 2016. Government was 12 per
cent
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in 2000, and fell slightly to 9% in 2016. Leisure and Hospitality were 17% in 2000 and dropped to 14 per
cent
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after 16 years.
At the end
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,
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the
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Economic
from
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sectors from
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Healthcare and Education
was
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were
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17% in 2000, and remained unchanged until 2016.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end".
Vocabulary: Replace the words cent with synonyms.
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