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the following table shows the number of factory workers for a given tie period in germany

the following table shows the number of factory workers for a given tie period in germany
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employees
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 in the factory sector and the
amount
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number
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 of male and female factory
workers
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 in Germany over 50 years , since the year 1851
until
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to
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 1901. In
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general
genearl
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genearl,
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 it is clear from the data that the
miximum
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maximum
 level of
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numbers
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number
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 of
employees
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were
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was
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 in 1851 , reached 447100
workers
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 , most of them were male
employees
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 , they were more than 50
percent
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from
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of
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 the total
workers
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.
Whearas
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, in
1901
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1901,
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 the
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numbers
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number
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 of
workers
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drobed
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dropped
 to the bottom level , the total
employees
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were
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 61000 , and
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numbers
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the numbers
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 of male and female
workers
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 were nearly the same. In terms of the year 1861 , ranked in the second place with regard to
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of
workers
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 ,
estimate
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estimated
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 around 291780
employees
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 in
diffrent
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different
 227 factories.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employees, workers, numbers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 4 times.
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