In some countries young people are encouraged to work or tavel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decided to do this.

Many young people in some countries , after finishing high school they

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or travel before going to study at university, and in the essay I will discuss and explain why

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idea has advantages and disadvantages. One of the main advantages of

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, it makes young people feel more responsible for what they do,

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makes money

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helps them in future when they start studying, and

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they will know more information about the kind of

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at a mall, they will know about marketing, and if they are interested in

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, they will choose

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major, because they have more experience before. But of course, they

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have disadvantages ,

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: when they

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so hard but the cash is not enough, it makes them feel tired

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they will feel less content. Not always is the

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fair. Travel is

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good for young person , it makes them feel relaxed and makes their brains less stressed. And it makes them know information about the city they will visit , maybe they will

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there someday. In conclusion, I strongly with to take break and working after finshed high school or travel, because it have more benefits and have more chance to think what you want to do in future, because some people they started study after finshed but they got lower rates and some of them withdrawal from university and lost a year in their live without any benefits.

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You addressed both advantages and disadvantages well, showing a balanced view.

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Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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251 words

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Character
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