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The line graph compares the population growth in India and China from 2000 and gives projections until 2050, based on data from the UN Population Division.

The line graph compares the population growth in India and China from 2000 and gives projections until 2050, based on data from the UN Population Division.
The graph below
present
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presents
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informetion
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information
 about gross domestic
product
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 from
IT
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the IT
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 and
service
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industry
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 of
UK
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the UK
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Overall
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, both the IT
industry
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 and
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service
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the service
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industry
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's gross domestic
product
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 have been increasing with time. There is some data that shows the IT
industry
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 is growing at a faster rate and more rapidly than ever,
while
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 the
service
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industry
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 shows low stages of rising, which makes IT
survice
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service
 over it. The IT
industry
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 shows high
big
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significant
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 increase in gross domestic
product
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 from 1992 to 2000. They start with 6
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persnt
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per cent
 in 1992
reaching
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, reaching
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 15
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persnt
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per cent
 in 2000
which
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, which
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 is a
big
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apply
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noticeable rise. In 1994,
IT
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the IT
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industry
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had
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apply
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saw a low decrease in GDP with
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a lose
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lose
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loss
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 of 2
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persnt
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per cent
. The most
significantly rose
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significant rise
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 was in 1998
comparing
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compared
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 to the past years, they
get
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got
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 6
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persnt
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per cent
 in GDP
which
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, which
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significantly
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significant
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 gain.
In
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On
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 the other
hands
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hand
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,
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service
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the service
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industry
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 was slowly increasing in Gross domestic
product
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 . From 1992 to 2000 ,
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service
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the service
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industry
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 only had 4
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persnt
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per cent
 of growth
considering
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, considering
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 that they have been eaten by IT
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service
Fix the agreement mistake
services
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Vocabulary: Replace the words product, service, industry, persnt with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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