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The line graph gives information about the percentage of people using three different modes of transport (car, bus, and train) in a European city from 1990 to 2020.

The line graph gives information about the percentage of people using three different modes of transport (car, bus, and train) in a European city from 1990 to 2020.
The line graph gives information about the
percentage
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 of people using three different modes of transport (
car
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,
bus
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, and
train
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) in a European city from 1990 to 2020.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
percentage
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 of
car
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 users showed a significant increase during the
period
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,
while
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 the proportion of
bus
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 users experienced a steady downward trend.
In contrast
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,
train
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usage
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 remained relatively stable with a slight rise toward the end. In detail, the
usage
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 rates of
car
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,
bus
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, and
train
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 were 45%, 40%, and 15% respectively in 1990.
Car
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usage
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 went up sharply through the
period
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, exceeding 50% in 2005 and reaching 70% by the end of the
period
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. The
percentage
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 of
bus
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 users in 1990
decreased
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to 30% in 2005 and
then
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 remained steady until 2015. From 2015 to 2020, it experienced a rapid drop to more than 20% and continued with a gradual decline to 18% in 2020. Moving on to
train
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usage
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, in early 1990, the
usage
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 rate of
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train
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 at 15% was the lowest among the three transportation types.
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, it sharply declined to 10% by 2000, recording the lowest
percentage
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 compared to the other two modes.
Then
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, there was a rise of 5% in 2010, but the
train
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 rate was still the lowest by the end of the
period
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, car, bus, train, period, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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