The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given charts
preasent
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present
a
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apply
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data
of
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on
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the place
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place
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places
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and types of
dances
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dance
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classes young individual Australians attend in a city .
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,Ballet was the most
attending
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attended
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class
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by people
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age
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apply
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under 11
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in
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the other hand
the
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, the
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modren
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modern
class
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most
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was most
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commen
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common
by
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among
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people between the
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age
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ages
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of 11 to 16
and
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, and
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the most dominant
place
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to visit in the city was private studios . The pie chart
illustrate
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illustrates
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that the most
attendant
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attended
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place
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by young people was private studios with almost half .The other
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place
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places
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that were visited are school halls,community halls and
college based
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college-based
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studios ,with 24%,18%and 10% respectively. The second
chars
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chart
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displays three types of dance classes
which
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, which
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are Ballet,Tap and
modren
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modern
classes.The most
attendant
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attended
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class
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by the
age
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under 11 was
Balket
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the Balket
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class
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with 600
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student
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students
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.
Modren
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Modern
class
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has the most
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student
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students
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for
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,
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apply
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the
age
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of 11 to 16
with
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, with
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500
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student
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students
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.The Tap
class
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being
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is
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in the middle with more the 400
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student
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students
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visit
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visiting
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the
class
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in both
age
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groups .

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words place, class, age, student with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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