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The charts show the share of global manufacturing and exports for four countries between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the share of global manufacturing and exports for four countries between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and making comparisons where relevant.
The given charts
displays
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display
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 the proportion
global
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of global
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 manufacturing and exports in four different countries between 1985 and 2005
Overall
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, service was the highest
precentage
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percentage
 in both years
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, following
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following
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followed
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 it
manyufacturing
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manufacturing
 in the second place
and
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, and
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 both of them increased. The two highest
sharing
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sectors
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 in the markets are service and manufacturing, with 40% and 31% respectively.Both of the increased and still had their dominance in 2005 with a proportion of 44% and 33%. The other
service
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services
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has
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that have
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 the least shares of the market are Info-com technic and
materials
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materials,
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has
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which have
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 slightly increased from 15% and 3%
yo
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to
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 16%and 4%.The other two are agriculture and energy
which
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, which
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the
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apply
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have dropped from 4% and 7% to 5% and 1%.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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