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The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000

The following bar chart shows the different modes of transport used to travel to and from work in one European city in 1960, 1980 and 2000
The bar chart displays the various types of
the
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apply
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transportation
mode
Fix the agreement mistake
modes
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 of travel to and from work in
the
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apply
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Europe from 1960 to 2000.
Overall
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,
car
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the car
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 is many times greater than other
categorise
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categories
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,
while
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bike
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the bike
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 comes second.
On the other hand
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,
foot
Correct article usage
the foot
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 shows the highest decrease by the end of the period.
Bus
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The bus
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 was steadily
and
Verb problem
increasing and
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then
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 decreased slightly. In 1960,
foot
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the foot
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is
Wrong verb form
was
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 the dominant mode of transportation,

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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