Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree?

There are many essential things that
human
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humans
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needs
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need
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to maintain
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life. It can be nutrition, safe places and so on. On top of everything,
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imporant
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important
thing is '
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'.
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store collapsed in Korea and several
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got stuck in
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. There
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survivors indeed, and one of them said it was
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drops that kept her alive.
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, clean
water
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is
basic
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human
life
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and
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every home should be supplied with it for free. What would happen if we don't supply
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for free? First of all,
people
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would die
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lots of
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disease
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. Numerous
people
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in Africa suffer from dirty
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. They don't have
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water
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system, so
people
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have to walk miles after miles to get
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clean
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from the river. Of course,
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from
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is not clean either, because they keep it for days in hot weather
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which makes tons of
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grow in it. So it leads to the situation that
people
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die from drinking dirty
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. Some might say supplying every
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people
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in
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the country
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leads to
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lots
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of money loss, and urban places
are
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hard to make
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water
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supplying
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system. So I suggest that
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needs to provide at least
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system for human basic
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rights
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. There are many small filtering
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machines
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that
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easy to carry around and
also
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help
people
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in hard
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times
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.
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global warming,
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will go
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extreme
. Serious
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climate
changes are waiting for us, and drought,
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will follow us. Which will make more
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suffer
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clean
water
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.
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,
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the governmaent
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governmaent
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government
must provide clean
water
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or
water
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filters to
people
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for protecting
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there
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at least minimal rights.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure your essay has a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
positive
You have a strong argument about the importance of clean water.

Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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