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The pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a bookseller between 1972 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the percentage of five kinds of books sold by a bookseller between 1972 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts show the proportion of five kinds of
books
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 sold by a bookseller from 1972 and 2012.
Overall
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, what stands out from the charts is that
while
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sales
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 of adult and children's
fiction
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books
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 increased,
sales
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 of other types of
books
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 experienced a decline over the given period. As the graph shows,
initially
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, 20% of adults'
fiction
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books
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 were sold in 1972, followed by a small increase to 25% in 1992.
Then
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, the
sales
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 of it continued increasing to almost 45% in 2012.Regarding children’s
fiction
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books
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,
also
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showed
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apply
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a slight rise.In 1972, 20% of kids'
fiction
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books
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 were bought,
then
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 it grew by 5%, from 20% to 25% in 2012.
By contrast
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, the
sales
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 of other types of
books
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 declined.When it comes to the
sales
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 of biographies, the
sales
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 started at 20% in 1972, followed by a sharp decrease to 8% in 2012.As for
books
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 about travel, the
sales
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 started at 15%, after that , despite increasing to 18% in 1992, the figure dropped to 10% in 2012.Turning to other types of
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books
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books,
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 were
sold
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increased
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25
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by 25
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% at
first,
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then
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 they declined from 25% to 12% in 2012.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, sales, fiction with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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