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The process of producing drinking water by solar power powdered pump and filter. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The given diagram illustrates the process of generating potable
water
Use synonyms
 with the help of solar power.
Overall
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, there are three main stages involved in
this
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 process
:
Punctuation problem
:
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 producing electricity, pumping
water
Use synonyms
 and
filter
Replace the word
filtering
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water
Use synonyms
.
This
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 process is a simple and mechanical one, and requires some technologies.
To begin
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 with, solar
panel
Fix the agreement mistake
panels
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 collect energy from sunlight, and
then
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sent
Wrong verb form
send
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them
Correct pronoun usage
it
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 to a converter, where solar energy
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 converted to electricity. After that, it
is gone
Wrong verb form
goes
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 to
special
Correct article usage
a special
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 pump machine through
solid
Correct article usage
a solid
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 wire. In there, the next main stage
begin
Correct subject-verb agreement
begins
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, with
this
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 technology pumping underground
water
Use synonyms
 to
Use synonyms
water
Correct article usage
a water
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 tank, which
located
Verb problem
is located
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 on the top of
wooden
Correct article usage
a wooden
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 platform. The storage has essential details, and can keep
water
Use synonyms
a
Change preposition
for a
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long time.
The next step is
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 purification,
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this
Correct pronoun usage
which
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happen
Correct subject-verb agreement
happens
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 in the
water
Use synonyms
 tank. Once gone through
metal
Correct article usage
the metal
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 tube, drinking
water
Use synonyms
poured
Verb problem
is poured
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to
Change preposition
into
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smaller
Correct article usage
a smaller
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moveable
Correct word choice
movable
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contairner
Correct your spelling
container
. Before
water
Use synonyms
 enters the container, there is a tap
at
Change preposition
on
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 the tube, which can provide
the
Correct article usage
apply
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control.
Finally
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,
water
Use synonyms
 in the portable container is ready
tu
Correct your spelling
to
 use.

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coherence and cohesion
Add a clear conclusion to summarize the main points of the essay.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words to connect your ideas better.
task achievement
Make sure to correct any spelling errors, like 'tu' to 'to'.
task achievement
Provide more specific details about each stage of the process, such as the type of filter used.
task achievement
The introduction clearly states the main stages of the process.
coherence and cohesion
The description of the stages is mostly clear and logical.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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