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The charts below show the percentage of male and female worker in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentage of male and female worker in country A and country B. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The charts
provides
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provide
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about information
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information about
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distribution
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the distribution
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proporation
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proportion
 of
man
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men
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 and
men
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women workers
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worker
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 in
country
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 A to
B
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country B
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country
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. The units are measured in
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precentage
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percentage
.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graphs that Services often
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worker
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work
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 both male and female 
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country
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from countries
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 A and
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country
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apply
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B.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 Agriculture
proporation
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proportion
great
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is great
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 in
Male
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males
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 and
Female
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females
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 in
country
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 A.
According to
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 what is shown, in most countries A both man and
men
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women
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 was
high
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a high
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precentage
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percentage
 of Services by 56% and 49%
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precentage
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percentage
.
While
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Industry
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the Industry
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 was minimum
of
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in
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 all countries by 15% and 8%
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precentage
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percentage
.
However
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, Agriculture
was little
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had
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 of Male
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worker
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workers
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 in
country
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 A and
be
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became
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 comes increase of Female
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worker
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workers
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 in A by 29% and 43%
precentag
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respectively
. In terms of
countries
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country
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 B, Services were
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the must
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must
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most
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proporation
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proportion

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words worker, country, precentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • workforce
  • percentage
  • male-dominated
  • female-dominated
  • sector
  • industry
  • disparity
  • proportion
  • predominance
  • statistical
  • trend
  • comparison
  • economically active
  • gender gap
  • labor market
  • employment rate
  • significant
  • minority/majority
  • contrast
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