The line graph provides information about the number of visitors who visit international museums from 1980 to 2015.

The line graph provides information about the number of visitors who visit international museums from 1980 to 2015.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph provides information about the number of visitors who visit international museums from 1980 to 2015.
The line graph provides key information about the
figures
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for tourists who
tour
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visit
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international museums over a period
35
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of 35
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years between 1980 and 2015.
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overall
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Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that
although
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there was notable fluctuation, the number of visitors
in
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to
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Louvre
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the Louvre
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and
Batican
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Vatican
Museums
were
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apply
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increased by the end of the given period,
whereas
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the
figures
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for
London
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the London
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Science
Museum
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were
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apply
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decreased by the end of the given period. According
what
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to what
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is shown, in 1980 the numbers of visitors in
Louvre
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the Louvre
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and
Vatican
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the Vatican
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Museums
were
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apply
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stood at 5 and 8
millions
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million
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approximately and respectively. After
thirty five
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thirty-five
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years, the
figures
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have
went
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gone
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up sharply to approximately 9
millions
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million
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in 2015. Before
that
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that,
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they rose steadily to nearly 6 and 8.5 in 1990. In terms of
London
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the London
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Science
Museum
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and
Shenzhen
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the Shenzhen
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Museum
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, the
figures
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for visitors plummeted gradually
exactly
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, exactly
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3
millions
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million
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in 1990.
Then
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the Shenzhen
Museum
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has
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rose steadily to nearly 4 in 2015.
While
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the London Science
Museum
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has dropped dramatically to 2
approximaletly
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approximately
in 2015.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words figures, museum with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provides" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • number
  • visitors
  • museums
  • international
  • years
  • increase
  • million
  • growth
  • rate
  • notable
  • steady
  • sharp
  • trend
  • data
  • access
  • travel
  • information
  • reach
  • significant
  • about
  • overall
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