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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatmens instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Nowadays, a large number of
people
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 with
health
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 issues are using medicines and treatments without a prescription,
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, ignoring visiting specialists as doctors
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 prescribe a proper one. I believe that
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behavior
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 can seriously harm their
health
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 and lead to a serious medical condition. On the one hand,
people
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 should maintain their
health
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 by following suitable healthy eating habits.
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, eating junk food or drinking soda are examples of a harmful lifestyle that can negatively affect
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.
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, individuals will choose to get any medicine that reduces the pain, without knowing if it is suitable. It is believed that the use of medicines becomes widespread for several reasons.
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, social media and well-known doctors motivate
people
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 to maintain their
health
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 by using multivitamins or serums. On the one hand,
this
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 is good for
people
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 to take care of their
health
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 and
assist
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help
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 their body to be stable.
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, sometimes doctors forget to mention what
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 that
people
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 should be alert
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 and the age range that can use it. If these are not mentioned in the doctor's
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 it will lead to a serious
health
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 problem. Ultimately, we should all be aware of our
health
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 and read the
medicines
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medicine's
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 prescription. In conclusion,
people
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 must look after their
health
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 and use a medicine
that is
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 prescribed
from
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by
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 specialists to avoid serious
health
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 problems and
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 to maintain
individual's
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an individual's
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health
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 since it is precious and
unnegotiated
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irreplaceable
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.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your main opinion in the introduction and give reasons for it in each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words to connect your ideas better, such as 'firstly', 'for example', 'on the other hand', and 'in conclusion'.
task achievement
You clearly address the topic of health and alternative medicines, and you provide specific examples.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps to frame your argument.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • doctor
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • believe
  • natural
  • safer
  • traditional medicine
  • health outcomes
  • chronic issues
  • relief
  • conventional medicine
  • empower
  • patients
  • hope
  • managing
  • necessary medical treatment
  • unproven
  • avoid
  • worsening
  • professional
  • intervention
  • acceptance
  • research
  • integration
  • mainstream healthcare
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