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The chart below shows the number of jobs in tourism related industries in one UK city between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of jobs in tourism related industries in one UK city between 1989 and 2009. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustration depicts the rate of
employement
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employment
 in the companies in
tourism
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the tourism
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 sector in
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the Uk
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Uk
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UK
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 from 1989 to 2009. The food chain businesses and
accomodations
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accommodations
 have been the most prevalent sectors amongst all in terms of hiring and expanding. There has been a steady increase in
jobs
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 for sports and leisure
activites
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activities
 in the decade.
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, in the
1990's
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1990s
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 there was a relatively higher job market than in
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the 2000's
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2000's
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2000s
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 for the tourism agencies. In 1989, there were around 11,00
jobs
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 in the food chain, around
a
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apply
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1050 for hotel staff and not far behind came the entertainment sector.
Similalrly
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Similarly
, in 1994, the most
opportunties
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opportunities
 were open for resorts and spas at a
whooping
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whopping
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 number of 1400
and
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, and
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 the lowest were at 700 for sports facilities. A surge was seen in
working
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the working
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 sector for travel agents at 11,00
jobs
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 being the personal best in
cumilative
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cumulative
 years.
In Addition
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 to
this
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, a decline was noticed in the
employement
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employment
 ratio from 1999 to 2004 for sports and travelling markets. In 2004, marked the
unparallel
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unparalleled
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 increase in the
jobs
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 for
restraunts
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restaurants
 at
1600
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1600,
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 with
lowering down
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a decline
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 to 1300 in 2009. Meanwhile,
on the other
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hand
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hand,
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 the transition of
employement
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employment
 rate stayed fairly stable for hotels
fro
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from
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 2004 to
2009
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2009,
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 around 1100 to 1050.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words jobs with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • significant increase
  • moderate rise
  • sharp fall
  • peak
  • trough
  • stagnant
  • sector
  • tourism-related industries
  • employment figures
  • data
  • time period
  • comparison
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