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Band 4.5

Increasing the price of patrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

If the price of
the
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fossill
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fossil
 fuels
such
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 as
the
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patrol
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petrol
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 goes higher,
then
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 it will
dcreaase
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decrease
 the growing transportation and pollution.
However
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, I strongly agree with that since it will solve the problem of global warming . But I
also
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 think there should be
others
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other
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 criteria to take, as an example, reforestation
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 with,I believe increasing the prices of the
patrol
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 and the growing
traffics
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traffic
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 is a critical step toward
an
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a
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 stable ecosystem, as it will solve the problem of global warming. By lowering the emissions that
came
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 out of transportation, and the high price of the
patrol
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which
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, which
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 will
led
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lead
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 to
reduction
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a reduction
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of
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in
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 the people who are fundamentally using
patrol
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car
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cars
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, will
consider
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be considered
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 an important element to rebalance the normal ecosystem, and that includes
the
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endanger
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endangered
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 animals
,
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apply
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 and plants.
For instance
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, the rising prices of
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patrol
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petrol
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 caused the invention of other clean resources
such
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 as
hypird
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hybrid
 cars Another thing I want to point out is that there are
others criterion
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other criteria
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 that should be taken
in
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into
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 consideration. Reforestation is the most important step to solve the pollution crisis, trees can absorb the emissions that
are came
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come
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 out of
fossil
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the fossil
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 fuels industry, and
as a
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result
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 it can reduce
temperature
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the temperature
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 that has been rising since the
nineteenths
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nineteenth
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.
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century.
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For
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example
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example,
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 studies show that planting trees can lower the temperature
for
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by
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 about 1.5C
-
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°C - 2C
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2C
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2 °C
 In conclusion, increasing the price of
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patrol
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petrol
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 it's the best way to solve the
raising
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rising
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 number of
traffics
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traffic
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user
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users
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 and
the
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apply
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global pollution, as
this
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 increase will lead to the
dcrease
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number
 of
patrol
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cars user
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car users
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,
and
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apply
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which
by
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apply
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will cause
an
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a
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 balanced ecosystem . Another measures
need
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that need
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 to be taken is
replant
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replanting
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 or reforestation,
it
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which
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 will cause a huge number of trees that will absorb
enormous
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an enormous
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 amount of CO2.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your position in the introduction. Avoid spelling errors like 'patrol' (should be 'petrol') and 'dcreaase' (should be 'decrease').
coherence and cohesion
Use clearer linking words to connect your ideas, such as 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'in addition'. This helps the reader follow your arguments.
task achievement
Ensure that your examples clearly support your points. For instance, explain how hybrid cars relate to your main argument about pollution.
task achievement
The writer shows a good understanding of the topic and presents a relevant personal opinion.
task achievement
The inclusion of reforestation as an additional measure is insightful and adds depth to the argument.
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