Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditiond are difficult, such as the Sahar desert or the Antartic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

In today`s fast-paced world, many visitors are choosing to visit
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adventureus
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adventurous
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for their holiday destination,
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as
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the Sahar
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Sahar
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Sahara
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desart
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desert
and
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the Antartic
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Antartic
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Antarctic
ocean. The advantages of visiting
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a place are more
fun
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and adventure, as they can learn something new,
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the drawbacks are
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that they
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can lose their
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and can be
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stuck
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certain
places
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, where no
one
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can rescue them.
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with, everyone
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to choose their holiday location where no
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can go, and they want to try something new to put on social media.
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,
people
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are putting their
life
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in
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risk and they go for the
fun
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activities, which may give them pleasure
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,
people
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are going to numerous
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like visiting the Titanic and
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Mount Everest,
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one
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is at the
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deepest point of
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sea
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the sea
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level
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and the other
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one
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at the highest point of the earth. At
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this
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places
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temprature
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temperature
and pressure are not at a normal level, which makes them famous.
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, there was an article in the Times of India which says 70 per cent
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people
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of people
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are
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going to
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more
fun
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at the
adventures
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spot, which
make
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them happy.
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, the
people
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can lose
thier
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their
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if something
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go right, or they can be trapped
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some area, where nobody can save them.
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, they can get
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an extreme
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feel
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feeling
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by visiting
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places
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,
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there is
high
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a high
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risk of death at
such
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places
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like the mountains and see diving.
Furthermore
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, they can be
stucked
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stuck
at
places
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where no
one
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can go or save them, because of changing climate conditions.
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research done by Western Sydney University which mentioned
people
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love more
fun
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and
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activities,
while
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in 2 per cent
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they are losing their
lives
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. In conclusion, the
benifits
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benefits
of visiting difficult
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are
a
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that a
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person can be famous and can enjoy more
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in contrast
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, in
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a few
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cases
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they can
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lose
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their
lives
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and can be trapped in difficult conditions.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...
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