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Band 3.5

Many people believe that global warming is the biggest environmental challenge of our time. What are the causes of global warming, and what solutions can be implemented to address this issue?

There is no denying the fact that the biggest challenge of our time is
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global warming.
This
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 essay will discuss the reasons behind global warming and how to address
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 problem.
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global
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the global
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 warming problem, but the main causes are cars and
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 emissions
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COVID-19
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the COVID-19
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 pandemic, especially during the lockdown, there
were
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 a significant decrease in traffic and factory activity, which led to a noticeable increase in the air quality.
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, a lot of people still do not
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 how global warming can affect us.
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, humans may feel comfortable now,
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 animals
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 as polar bears are suffering because of ice melt. In terms of solutions, there are several steps that could be taken. One of the easiest ways is
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 using
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public transportation
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 of private cars. It is
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 possible to say that governments should choose certain days when no vehicles
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are allowed
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, except bicycles, to reduce pollution. Factories
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also should
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 be controlled to limit their emissions.
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, awareness campaigns can help to spread awareness about the long-term
effect
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 of global warming and encourage them to take action. In conclusion, there are many reasons
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this
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 trend
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 instance,
vehicles
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vehicle
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 and
factories
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factory
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 emissions, plus
lack
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 of information about how serious
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this
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 problem. It is
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 true that we can fix
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 issue with small steps,
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 as using public transportation and
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 the public.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly explain each reason and solution with more detail and examples.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas in a more logical order. Use connecting words to link your thoughts better.
coherence and cohesion
Use simpler sentences to make your points clearer. Avoid complex phrases that can confuse the reader.
task achievement
You have chosen an important topic and provided some relevant points.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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