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Band 3

Some think it is a good thing for senior managers to have much higher salaries than the other workers in a company. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that it is a nice thing
to
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 older
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mangers
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managers
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 to
recive
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receive
high
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a high
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 salary. It is commonly held
belife
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belief
 that it is better for older
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mangers
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managers
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 to have
greater
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a greater
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 salary
that
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than
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 the normal employees, there is
also
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argument
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 that opposes it. In my opinion, I consider it is better for senior
managers
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 to
recive
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receive
higher
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a higher
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 salary than the normal employees.
To begin
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 with, senior
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mangers
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 worked hard for the
company
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.
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, the senior
managers
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 deal with the
company
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 repatriation as
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thier
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their
 own life.
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, the senior
managers
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 spend
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thier
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their
 time
withot
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without their
thier
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 families just to improve the
company
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 and make it the most successful one.
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, Elon
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 work most of his day at his office and he never
got
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gets
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 the opportunity to meet his family unless he has a holiday.
On the other hand
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,
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mangers
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managers
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 are probably the
one
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ones
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 who take
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thier
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their
 work more
serious
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seriously
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 than the other workers.
In other words
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, the
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mangers
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managers
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 will not go to the hospital to have excuses to be absent from work
but
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 other workers might do it.
Moreover
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, the
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mangers
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 are the
company
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's face
so
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, so
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 whatever
happen
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happens
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 it will be on them.
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, if the
company
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catched
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caught
while
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 it was scamming
people
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people,
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 the
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mangers
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managers
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 will be the ones who take the responsibility. In conclusion,
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despite
 people having different views, I believe that
the
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it is fair and well known that the senior
managers
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 receive higher salaries than the normal workers.

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content
Your essay shows a good understanding of the topic and provides your opinion clearly.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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