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The table and charts below give information about doctors in Australia between 1986 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information about doctors in Australia between 1986 and 2006. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts
provid
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provide
 key information about the
amount
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number
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 of doctors in
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Australia
Ausrtalia
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Ausrtalia,
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 involve their genders and the place they
born
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were born
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, in the years 1986, 1996 and 2006. The units are measured in numbers and percentages.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the number of
worker
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workers
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 increased significantly throughout the periods.
In addition
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, male doctors
were
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apply
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always
have
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had
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higher
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a higher
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 number than
the
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apply
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female
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females
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,
whereas
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,
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apply
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 people who
born
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were born
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 outside of Australia formed
the
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a
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 lower amount compared to
who
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those
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 born in
Astralia
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Australia
.
According to
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 what is shown, the percentage of men decreased slightly,
it started
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starting
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 at around 75 % in 1986 to
become
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becoming
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 60 per cent in 2006.
womens
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Women's
 had a steady increase, it grew around a double, in 1986 they accounted for 25 %, and rose to 40 per cent in 2006. In terms of the place of birth, the employees
who
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apply
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born in Australia
were
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apply
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exceeded the
numbers
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number
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 of
who
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those
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 born overseas in 1986 and 1996, but in 2006 the
amount
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number
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 was similar of
who
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those
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 born outside.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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