Fossil fuels such as coal, oil and natural gas are used in many countries. However, in some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy has been encouraged. Is this a positive or negative development?

Fossil fuel is
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one of the worst
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effects
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on our
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,but many
countries
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consume it because it is cheap.
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, main
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some
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countries
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is
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using renewable
energy
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which
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helps the
environment
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by not
exposing
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CO2. The
countries
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like Norway
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using
eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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energy
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are maintaining the
environment
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to be healthier.
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the effect of using fossil fuel is the quality of life
decrease
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, the harmful impact on
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animals
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and plants.
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, nowadays Saudi Arabia
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fossil fuel to provide vehicles
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and houses, which will lead to more CO2 emissions that will affect the
residence
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of the country.
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, the
non eco friendly
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non-eco-friendly
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energy
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will
to
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destroy the planet by
high
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emitting high
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carbon dioxide will lead to damage the
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of the plant.
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, the vegan animal will not find food to survive.
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, Oslo is
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of the best
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aspects
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of a sustainable city because
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use
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renewable
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.That
lead
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to
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most of the
human
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humans
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and the
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creatures
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living a
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high life quality because of sufficient CO2.
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Fliex and Mohammed, Oslo ranked the highest percentage of electric vehicles.
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,the
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and the wildlife
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healthy and
sustainable
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In conclusion, the
countries
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that
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using
unrenewable
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nonrenewable
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energy
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are destroying our planet and
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a harmful effect
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the wildlife.
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,
countries
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like Norway are trying to maintain our planet healthy by consuming
eco friendly
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eco-friendly
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energy
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.

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task achievement
Rewrite the introduction to clearly state your position. For example, say that using alternative energy is a positive development.
coherence cohesion
Use clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should have one main idea.
coherence cohesion
Check grammar. Some sentences are difficult to understand because of mistakes.
task achievement
You give examples of countries like Saudi Arabia and Norway, which is good for your argument.
task achievement
You mention both positive and negative effects of fossil fuels, which shows understanding of the topic.

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Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

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Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
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  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example
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