Many people think that the behavior of professional sportsmen off the field is not important as long as they are good players. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

There is a concept that it is important that
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should play good
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, and
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their outside behaviour and attitude from the playground does not matter a lot. I disagree with
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notion
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some solid reasons. On one side, most of the
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believe that
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and aura of celebrities
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to
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other
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in a broad way.
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also
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seems
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as a celebrity
for
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in
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the
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society.
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follow their so many steps in their own
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like
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, like
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what they will intake as a diet , what clothes they are wearing and
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even how they are talking and responding to the community folks.
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Virat Kohli is a cricket
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of
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the Indian
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team, his
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every
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move copied by the youngsters, because he is
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a role
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model for young
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. The
off field
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life
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of a
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impacts
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because
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the media
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showing
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each and every activity of the
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players
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players,
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whether
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their
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personal or social
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, and definitely local
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influenced
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are influenced
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by the famous
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. On the other side ,
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a few
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people
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are saying that it is totally fine that whatever
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do outside the field
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is their personal matter. They are being supportive
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of
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the
players
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and respect their privacy.
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statement only suits
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those
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who are more practical and do not engage much
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player
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's outside
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after matches. Most of the
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are emotionally connected with the
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players
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players,
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that
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which
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is why they
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from
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their actions. I strongly believe that a
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needs to be a good human being and fit physically and mentally
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apply
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, so that he or she can motivate
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the young
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generation towards a better and creative
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. In conclusion, it is imperative that a
player
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should be an ideal person who can give shape to
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society in a positive way and
delivers
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deliver
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good results and qualities to the community.

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure each point is clearly connected to your main argument. Use linking words to improve flow.
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Your ideas need to be more developed with better examples and explanations.
coherence and cohesion
Provide a clearer introduction that summarizes your main points and a stronger conclusion that wraps up your argument more clearly.
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You present a clear opinion on the topic which is important.
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You provide relatable examples, such as mentioning Virat Kohli, which helps illustrate your points.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • role model
  • media-driven
  • publicized
  • public opinion
  • societal norms
  • brand representation
  • sponsors
  • inappropriate behavior
  • team dynamics
  • morale
  • personal accountability
  • public image
  • career and legacy
  • off-field behavior
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