In these days, more tourists are visiting museums and historical sites than local people. Why is this? What can be done to mitigate this issue?

Nowadays, historical landmarks and museums are visited more by tourists than
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and offer proper solutions to alleviate. One primary reason why local individuals visit historical sites is familiarity. As they have been to these places before, it is not enthralling for them to revisit. It seems
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waste of time, since they have seen the objects that are exhibited there many times.
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, everything is new and intriguing for foreigners
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the fact that they have come to these locations for the first time.
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, cost is another factor that can impact local attendance. It is a fact that citizens are reluctant to pay for the site that they have witnessed before.

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Try to add a conclusion that summarizes your points and offers your thoughts on the future.
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Use paragraphs to separate your ideas more clearly, which makes it easier for the reader to follow.
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Avoid repetition in phrases and ideas. Each sentence should introduce a new point.
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The essay addresses the topic and attempts to analyze the reasons behind the issue.
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There is a logical development of ideas in the paragraphs you have started.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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