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The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The chart below gives information about global population percentages and distribution of wealth by region. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the data about the proportion of
population
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 and wealth shared by area.
Overall
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,
the
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North
America
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 has
highest
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the highest
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 amount of wealth,
while
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the
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apply
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India and
the
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apply
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Africa
has
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have
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lowest
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the lowest
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 capital.
In addition
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,
the
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Chin
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China
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 has
highest
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the highest
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 amount of
population
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and
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, and
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 the Rich Asia-Pacific has
lowest
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the lowest
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population
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, where
the India has
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India has the
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 highest poverty
and
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, and
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the
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apply
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North
America
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 is
richest
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the richest
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.
Firstly
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,
the
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apply
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North
America
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 has
highest
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the highest
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 amount of money with nearly 35% of capital,
while
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 the public is just above 5%,
while
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the
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Latin
America
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 and
Caribbean
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the Caribbean
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has
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have
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 both around 5%.
Furthermore
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,
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Europe has huge 30%
assests
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assets
 with around 15% people.
Lastly
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,
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India and
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Africa are poor with just around 1% capital,
while
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 the
population
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 is around 10% and 15%,
while
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the China is
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China is the
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highest
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most
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poplulated
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populous
 with around 22% citizens.
Moreover
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, the Rich Asia-Pacific is wealthy and the Other Asia-Pacific is very poor in
tearms
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terms
 of people
aginst
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against
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wealth
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the wealth
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 of the nation.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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