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The chart below provides information about the growth of urban population in certain parts of the world including future prediction. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below provides information about the growth of urban population in certain parts of the world including future prediction. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the number of urban population in four parts of the
world
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 between the
years
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 1950 and 2000,
also
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 predicting the year 2030.It can clearly be seen that there has been an increase in urban communities in every part of the
earth
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 over the
years
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. As can be seen,
Latin
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America
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 has had the most urban population over the
years
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 compared to other parts of the
world
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.Asia and Africa have almost the same ratio of expansion,
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 figures for the whole
world
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 have risen steadily.The total number of urban
people
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 in
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latin
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Latin America
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america
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 went from 40% to 80% in 80
years
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notice
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.The proportion of urban
people
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 in 1950 was very low in Africa and Asia, but in
Latin
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America
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 it was 40%. The growth rate of urban
people
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 in
Latin
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America
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 is higher than
the
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 rest of the
world
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.
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, in 2000, the percentage of
people
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 who lived in the city
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increased steadily.In 2030, the expectations of the variety of urban families are very high.no no yes

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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, years, latin, america, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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