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The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average monthly change in the prices of three metals during 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line chart compares the proportion of
change
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 in average prices of copper,
nickel
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, and zinc changing among 12 months in 2014.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the prices of
nickel
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 have the largest difference between the beginning of the year and the end.
While
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 the percentage of
change
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 in the
price
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 of zinc has a slight increase during the period, copper and
nickel
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can be seen
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 a fall. In January, the percentage
change
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 in the average
price
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 of
nickel
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 is six, and
then
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 drops dramatically to minus three in June.
Then
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, it increased to minus
one
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 in July and stayed unchanged for three months. After falling slightly, the
change
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 in
price
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 goes up to two
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percent
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per cent
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.
By contrast
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, zinc starts with
one
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percent
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per cent
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, and
then
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increased
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increases
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 to three
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percent
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per cent
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 in
Febrary
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February
.
However
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, it
then
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 decreases to minus
one
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percent
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per cent
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 in
Octuber
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October
, rocketing to two
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percent
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per cent
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in
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by
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 the end of the year. The
price
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 of copper is quite stable, despite the
price
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change
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 has a bit
fluctuation
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of fluctuation
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 between two and minus
one
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, it drops only by 0.5% during the whole year.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words change, nickel, price, one, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drops" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuate
  • volatile
  • stability
  • peak
  • trough
  • increment
  • decrement
  • steady
  • gradual
  • sharp
  • increase
  • decrease
  • month-on-month
  • average monthly change
  • commodity
  • benchmark
  • trend
  • precipitous
  • plateau
  • significant
  • marginal
  • surge
  • dip
  • plummet
  • soar
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