The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows the numbers of male and female research students studying six science-related subjects at a UK university in 2009. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the research
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students
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on students
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studying six
science related
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science-related
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subjects at
the
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a
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UK university in 2009, and
comparison
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a comparison
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of
students
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from female and male.
Overall
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, the boys
studying
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are studying
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biology and physics more,
while
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girls
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the girls
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selecting
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are selecting
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the
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apply
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biology and
medicine
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.
In addition
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, male
students
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is more than a
girls
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pupils
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,
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;
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however
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however,
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veterinary
medicine
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have
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has
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more ladies compared to
mens
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men
.
Firstly
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, physics has
major
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a major
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difference in male and female
students
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, with around 225 males against just below 50
girls
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,
while
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the
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apply
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medicine
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has nearly similar
pupils
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in both
gender
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genders
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.
Moreover
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, astronomy and geology
has
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have
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similar male 150 candidates and around
similar
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apply
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70
females
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female
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pupils
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.
Lastly
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, biology has
highest
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the highest
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overall
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students
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with around 230 gents and 200
girls
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,
while
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veterinary
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the veterinary
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medicine
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subject has more females than
mens
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males
with more than 100 ladies
pupils
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and about 90 gents candidates.
Furthermore
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,
astromony
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astronomy
has
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had
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lowest
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the lowest
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total
students
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compared to other subjects in 2009.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall, while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, girls, medicine, pupils with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • chart
  • number
  • male
  • female
  • research
  • students
  • subjects
  • total
  • overall
  • significantly
  • higher
  • compared
  • indicating
  • gap
  • exception
  • balanced
  • representation
  • preference
  • attract
  • disciplines
  • data
  • suggests
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