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The maps below show changes experienced by the town of Lakeside at the beginning of the 21st century. Summarize the information by reporting the main features ,and make comparisons where relevant. (phuong)

The maps below show changes experienced by the town of Lakeside at the beginning of the 21st century. Summarize the information by reporting the main features ,and make comparisons where relevant. (phuong)
The maps illustrate how the
town
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 of Lakeside changed from 2000 to 2009.
Overall
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, the
town
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 became more modernised with transformation, and there were many buildings for entertainment
as well as
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 education. Moving into the detailed graph, on the left side of the
maps
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map
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, the residential area stayed unchanged through nine years. But near
this
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place
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place,
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 the Derelic warehouse and old
town
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 were destroyed, which were replaced by a car park, offices and a new university to serve the education and employment demand of people. As can be seen, the school was still in the old position,
whereas
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 the cinema was built on the site of the art centre to the west of the
town
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. Moving on to the other side of the river, the most striking changes were the disappearance of the residential area in
south-west
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the south-west
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 corner and
south-east
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the south-east
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 corner of the
town
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 to convert
,shopping
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into,shopping
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 area and
industrial
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an industrial
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 respectively.
Lastly
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, the lake was narrowed into ponds in 2009.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words town with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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