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Band 2.5

Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading." To what extent do you agree?

It is often suggested that
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 activity with a small boy
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can
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 change skills better and
most
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more
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 than reading.In my view,I completely agree with
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 suggestion,as it
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can
children's
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help children's
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 movement
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. Don't
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 only side everytime
this
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 good thing ; most boys don't like studying or reading ; they want to change shape
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and delay
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.The following paragraphs will elaborate on
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 debate and explain why
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I
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 believe that
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 is a valid approach.
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 with,I agree
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 study on the phone because
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play
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 with study alone,
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see
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 the app game fight and learn children's names , food and anything in English.
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 is because many small children
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cont
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 move
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their hands
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 or foot him in
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 time very important to give them enjoyable activities.
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,Must to develop any electronic device
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that can
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to
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help read and speak ,
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also
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and also
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 write be rodes enjoyable to
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enjoy understand
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understand
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understanding
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 the big people or
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the small
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, what do they do.
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, in the country
China
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of China
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 give modern electronics to
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help
 any person
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who needs
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 help.
To conclude
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,
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 two
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i
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I
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 speak
to
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of
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him
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are very important in
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 world
like
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, like
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 giving modern devices or
help
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poeple
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people
they
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who
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cant
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can't
 move body
are
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These are
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 the reasons why
i
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I
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 strongly support the idea that
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helping
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 people and
this
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 population the best for take more
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over
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 some
years
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.

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Task Achievement
Your introduction needs to clearly state your opinion. Try to rephrase the topic question in your own words before stating your agreement or disagreement.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure your paragraphs are clear. Each paragraph should focus on one main idea and have some clear supporting details. Use linking words to connect your ideas better.
Coherence and Cohesion
Improve your writing by using simpler sentences and avoiding grammar errors. Practice writing complete sentences with correct punctuation.
Task Achievement
You expressed a clear opinion on the topic, which is a good start for your essay.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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