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Band 3

Nowadays, some people believes to be self-employment than working under companies and organisation. what are the reasons of it and disadvantageses of being self- employeed.

As few workers
believes
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believe
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to be
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in being
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a
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apply
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self-ruled
individual
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individuals
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 rather than
,
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apply
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be
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being
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emplayee
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employed
 in
someonce
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one
 place. My essay will elaborate in depth about
reasons
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the reasons
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 and effects of being a
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business man
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businessman
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.
on
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On
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 the one hand,
citzens
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citizens
 running towards a
well-reputated
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well-reputed
business
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than
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rather than
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,
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apply
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 being in a company because of low pay scales.
For example
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, in one of the
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surveys
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survey
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survey,
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 it has been noticed that folks with
well known
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well-known
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 degrees are not respected by many agencies
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such
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, such
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 as
,
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apply
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 in
punjab
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Punjab
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 value of IT departments and MD doctors
are
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is
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 not
showen
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shown
 as
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the respected
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respected
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respect
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valued
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they actually
deserves
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deserve
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 in
forign
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foreign
 countries.
Although
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,
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apply
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work places
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workplaces
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 build mental and physical pressure on their workers even for just
a low reputated
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low-reputed
 assignments.
Hence
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, small pay scales and burden by companies
seen
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are seen
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 to be
more
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a more
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 common reason for establishing their own
empower
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empowerment
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.
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, it
also
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 leads to many disadvantages like
business
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rises
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risks
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, people should never
known
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know
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 when
value
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the value
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 of
market
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the market
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 will
changed
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change
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.
Whereas
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,
this
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 goes
direct
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directly
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 to the buildup of stress and mental disturbance
which
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, which
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 will end converts it in
sucidial
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suicidal
 cases.
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, in some
situation
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situations
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, they don't have
strong
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a strong
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 bank balance to initiate anything
so
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, so
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 for that, loans are the only way
for organising
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to organise
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business
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. At
end
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the end
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, with negative
outcomes
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outcomes,
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its
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it's
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 becoming harsh for them to complete their
loans
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loan
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installments
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instalments
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.
To sum up
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, new births with increasing poverty and unsatisfied
earning
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earnings
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 making
themselfs
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themselves
to
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apply
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go for their own startup
but
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, but
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this
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also
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 carries many advantages and disadvantages as discussed above.

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coherence and cohesion
Work on clear topic sentences in each paragraph to guide the reader.
task achievement
Expand on ideas and provide clearer explanations for better understanding.
coherence and cohesion
Check grammar and spelling to enhance readability and clarity.
task achievement
You presented a clear opinion and attempted to discuss both sides of the topic.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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