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In some countries it is illegal to reject candidates for a job based on their ages. Discuss advantages and disadvantages of this and give your own opinion.

There are different opinions about
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 topic. In my opinion, I believe that
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Job
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the Job
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 in
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it
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apply
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is
Frey
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 hard
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, it
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 is noon for
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the
 deficiency.In
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 writing, I will explain my reasons and give examples. First of
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all,
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 the disadvantages are the lack
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job
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 if you think about
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it and
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hard
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 in
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 situation was Frey aezy
for
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on
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 the
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apply
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19th
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 shows that life has been difficult the whole year
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 now it is more
defrint
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defined
. Another important reason is that
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this
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 year technology has been helping a lot
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For
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 instance, the remote
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working
job
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 has helped a
lot
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lot of
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people
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of people
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This
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 means that
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technology his been helping
my
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me
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 at first and another person in
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job
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my job
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 . In conclusion, I strongly believe that
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the future is going to be better
and
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 because of the reasons I mentioned above.

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Try to develop your ideas more fully to improve clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Pay attention to spelling and grammar for better communication.
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You have expressed your opinion clearly and made an effort to discuss the topic.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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