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The chart below shows the percentages of different types of household waste that were recycled in one city between 1992 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentages of different types of household waste that were recycled in one city between 1992 and 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates four different types of household
waste
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 that were recycled in a city from 1992 to 2002. They are measured by percentage.
Overall
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, the biggest amount of recycled was done in 2002 for
glass
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 and
paper
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.
On the other hand
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, the lowest
proportion
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 was for
plastic
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 in 1992. In 1992, the huge
proportion
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 of
waste
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 was
for
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apply
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cans by almost 18%.
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Moreover
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Moreover,
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 the
rate
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 of
glass
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 and
paper
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 in
this
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 year is equal to about 15 %. And
eventually
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eventually,
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 the lowest share was for
plastic
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, which was exactly 10
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percent
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per cent
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.
In
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This
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this
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 year, the difference between
4
Correct article usage
the 4
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categories was close to each other. The biggest
proportion
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 of
waste
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 material that
recycled
Verb problem
was recycled
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them
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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happened in
2002
Punctuation problem
2002,
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that
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with
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 the highest
was
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being
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 for
glass
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by
Punctuation problem
, by
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 just a little less than 50
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percent
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per cent
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. After
that
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that,
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 the second
rate
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 belonged to
paper
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, which was 10 units less than
glass
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.
In addition
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,
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the cans
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cans
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can
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rate
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 was more than 20
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percent
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per cent
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,
Punctuation problem
;
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however
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,
plastic
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 was
one fifth
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one-fifth
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 of
glass
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owing
Punctuation problem
, owing
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 to
rats
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rate
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 was just over 10
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percent
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per cent
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. In
1997
Punctuation problem
1997,
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that
Correct determiner usage
the
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rate
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recycled
Wrong verb form
of recycling
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 for medium
for
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apply
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glass
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 was under 30%
although
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 for
paper
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Use synonyms
proportion
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apply
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was just over 30% which shows the difference was almost less than 5%.
the
Fix capitalization
The
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cans
Check wording
cans'
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waste
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 was about half of
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paper
Correct article usage
the paper
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 because the
rate
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 was about 15
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percent
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per cent
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. And
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finally
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finally,
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 the little consumed that was used for recycling was for
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plastic
Punctuation problem
plastic,
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that
Correct pronoun usage
which
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 was equal
by
Change preposition
to
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amount
Correct article usage
the amount
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 in 2002.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words waste, glass, paper, proportion, plastic, rate, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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