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The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows local catches and imports of fresh fish into Perth, Australia for the years 2004 - 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table illustrates local catches and
imports
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 of Fresh Fish into Perth, Australia
between
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 2004 and 2014.
It is clear that
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 the majority of
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 is 8949 in 2009,
whereas
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 the minority of
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 is 3142.2 in 2004.
In addition
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, local and
imports
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 showed no consistent
trend
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 over ten years. One of the most notable features was that the largest total was 8949 in 2009.
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, the second largest was
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8845 in 2008. Except
from
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 those, the total ranged from 6532.7 to 3142.2. The
trend
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 of
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 was inconsistent. In 2004, it was 3142.2 and grew steadily until 2009, reaching 8949, which was the leading figure. After that, it reversed
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 to 6116.1 in 2011. Interestingly, it remained around five
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thousand
 from 2012 to 2014. Clearly, local and
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 did not follow a clear upward or downward
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. Similar to the
trend
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 of total, local had a tendency to increase until 2008, which was the highest local with 8136.2.
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, it dropped steadily and
finally
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 became 4739.9.
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,
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 had
similar
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a similar
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trend
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, which increased from 464.5 to 1203.7. After that, it repeated downward and upward direction.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words imports, trend with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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