Eating too much sugar is harmful for our health. Some people think that it is government responsibility to limit the amount of sugar they eat. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Jul 31, 2025

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Use paragraphs to organize your ideas. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea.

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Provide specific examples to support your points. This will make your argument stronger.

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You express your opinion clearly in the introduction and conclusion.

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Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

98 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

excessive
obesity
diabetes
public health issue
government intervention
regulations
processed foods
mandatory labeling
sugar tax
dietary choices
education
nutrition
food manufacturers
slippery slope
overregulation
individual freedoms
informed decisions

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