The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.
The two given pie charts illustrate the average distribution of consumption in five categories in all
family
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families
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in
Japan
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and
Malaysia
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in the year 2010. As an
overall
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perspective, in both
graph
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graphs
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the number of items across different categories
are
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mixed.
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,
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housing, food and other goods and services had the biggest share,
but
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transport and health care had
lowest
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the lowest
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costs in both countries. As can be clearly seen from the graph, among all categories, housing in
Malaysia
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and other goods and services in
Japan
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with
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34% and 29% respectively, have significantly highest portion in household spending.
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, health care was allocated as
minimum
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contribution in both
country
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countries
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which
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, which
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can
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means
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reported all
the
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people who live together in one house didn’t spend more money
for
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health
aspect
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. In terms of comparison, the proportion of household spending on transport in
Japan
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was two times greater than in
Malaysia
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which
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was
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Indicated
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Malaysian household spending less for vehicular movement.
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, food in
Malaysia
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with
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27% was three times bigger in comparison
of
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Japan
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, malaysia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household expenditures
  • proportion
  • cultural differences
  • economic differences
  • living standards
  • real estate market
  • public transportation
  • private transportation
  • infrastructure
  • government healthcare policies
  • quality of life
  • holistic view
  • inflation
  • economic growth
  • societal norms
  • globalization
  • communication expenses
  • education expenses
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