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Most people accept that we now live in a globalized world but not everyone agrees that this is beneficial. To what extent is globalization a positive or negative development?

In our contemporary life, major concern has been paid to living in a
globalized
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globalised
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world
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. Taking into
considreation
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consideration
 the significance of a
globalizion
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globalised
world
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, I totally advocate the point of view that we have
lots
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 of development
of
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 living in a globalization
world
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. Even though it has been proven that it has negative aspects
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such
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 as the local economy will not survive. It
also
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 has positive aspects
like
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 the
world
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 will be
the
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a
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 small
village
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. The central discussion is that the local economy will not survive
due to
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 many people
buy
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buying
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thier
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their
 items from
the
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apply
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other countries.
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in
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 other words , nowadays the supermarkets have
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 of the
proudcts
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products
 made
from
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in
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 other
country
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countries
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, so we
being
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are
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intresting
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interested
for
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in
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this
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 .
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 ,
according to
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sevral reasearches
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several research
and
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studies and
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 social studies in the
last
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 few years in the Middle East , results have
showen
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shown
 that the vast majority of individuals
perfer
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prefer
 to buy clothes, phones , and even food from
another
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other
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 countries.
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, it is certainly the case that the local economy will not survive and
pay
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 attention.
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, the
world
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 will be a small
village
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 because we feel
close
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closer
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from
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to
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 each other by
conncted
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connecting
in
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on
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 social media and learn
lots
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 of other
culture
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cultures
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.To
illustreat
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illustrate
 the argument, an obvious example is that
case
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of students
due to
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 they want to achieve
thier
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their
 dreams by
study
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 abroad , and they feel
will
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they will
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 miss
thier
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their
 families, but with
soical
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social
 media it is
esay
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easy
 to
conmmunicaion
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communicate
.
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, it is conclusively clear that the
globalized
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globalised
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world
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make
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makes
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 life
small
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a small
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village
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.
To sum up
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,
i
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I
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 totally believe that a
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globalised
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world
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devolopment
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development
 the life , because it
is make
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makes
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 the
world
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 like a small
village
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 , and it can
esaliy
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easily lead
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 to learn about other
culture
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cultures
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. Seen in
this
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globalized
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globalised
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world
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 development
have
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has
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lots
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 of
benifts
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benefits
.

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task achievement
Improve your introduction to clearly state your position on globalization. Make sure to summarize both positive and negative aspects.
coherence and cohesion
Use better connectors (like 'however', 'moreover', 'for example') to make your essay flow better. This will help readers follow your ideas.
task achievement
Check spelling errors such as 'globalization', 'consideration', 'interesting', and 'illustrate'. Make sure to proofread your work.
task achievement
You identified key points about globalization, such as the impact on local economies and cultural exchange.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion nicely summarizes your opinion about globalization benefits.
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