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2024)You want to arrange a conference for your company, and you need to ask one of your colleagues to give a presentation in this conference. Write a letter to your colleague. In your letter include: Details about the conference- Why you want your colleague to give the presentation – What arrangements you will do for this conference

Dear Sir/Madam, I hope
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 letter finds you well. I am writing to notify you regarding the upcoming conference. I want to give you
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 brief about the conference
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 and the list of
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things we have to prepare for that day.
Firstly
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, I have selected
top
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 five employees who will be preparing the
presentation
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 for the meeting. I will be selecting one candidate's
presentation
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 among
five
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 selected members who will be presenting on that special day. In
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presentation
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, you are all expected to cover all the marketing strategies to attract
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customers with attractive short videos
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 and colourful pictures. There should be
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a maximim
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maximim
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maximum
15
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 slides in the
presentation
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, and the duration of the
presentation
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 should be approximately 10 minutes. Everyone will be wearing proper formal dress and footwear as well.
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, after the
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 there will be
refreshment
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refreshments
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 provided to all the members from outside and within the
organization
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.
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,
Conference
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the Conference
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 will start right at 10 am and will end at 12 noon. I hope you will look after all the arrangements properly. If you have any doubts, please contact me. Thank
You
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, Manpreet Kaur

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task achievement
You should include a clear opening sentence to explain the purpose of the letter more directly.
coherence and cohesion
Try to separate your ideas into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should contain one main idea.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use proper formatting in your letter, like including a greeting and a closing statement in a more formal way.
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You mentioned the time and duration of the conference, which is important information.
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Your letter includes details about the presentation and the dress code, which shows thorough planning.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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