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The chart below shows the GDP growth per year for three countries between 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the GDP growth per year for three countries between 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart shows the annual percentage of
GDP
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growth
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 from 2002 to 2010. It's comparing the
growth
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 with
the
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apply
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countries like
Japan
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, Tunisia and Ecuador. The charts
shows
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show
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 the
growth
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 of
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Japan
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Japan's
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GDP
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year
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 by
year
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its
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, its
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increasing
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an increasing
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the
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apply
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percentage of annual
growth
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. Tunisia
2007
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2007,
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its
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it
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 increased
in
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by
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 6.3%,
by
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as
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the year
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year
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years
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passing its
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passed, it
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 seems like
decreasing
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apply
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the annual returns
to
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decreased to
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 3% in 2010.
Ecudador
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Ecuador's
year
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 charts
shows
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show
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 the
modrate
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moderate
growth
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 of up and down.
Linking Words
while
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While
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 comparing to Tunisia and
Japan
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 , they
achived
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achieved
 the maximum
grawth
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growth
 of 6% above,but Ecuador
not
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did not
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achived
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achieve
 more than
a
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apply
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4.8% in the past 4 years .Either we compare the three countries
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, the
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the
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Japan
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japan
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 focused on the
GDP
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growth
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perfectly
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, perfectly
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 resolving the problem of mistake, what
done
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was done
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 in
past
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the past
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year
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year,
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 they
focusing
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are focusing
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in
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on
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 the present
year
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 of improvements.
its
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It
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 shows the quality of work ,what
done
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has been
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 done
by
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over
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 the years.
To conclude
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 the
growth
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 of
GDP
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 the
Japan
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 was focused on their
growth
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but
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, but
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the
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apply
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Ecuador
not
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does not
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shows
Wrong verb form
show
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the
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an
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intersest
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interest
of
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in
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growth
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 . If
Ecador
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Ecuador
 focused
in Find
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on finding
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 the problems where they
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made mistake
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mistake
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mistakes
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,they could
also
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can
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apply
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achived thier
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achieve their
GDP
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 by
level
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levelling
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 up.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words gdp, growth, japan, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 9 times.
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