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The bar chart shows the number of hours worked per week by men and women in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of hours worked per week by men and women in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar chart compares the amount of men's and women's working time in a week in Australia.
Overall
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, the highest proportion of working
hours
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 is between 30 and 50 for both genders. The minimum proportion of
that is
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 0-10 for males, compared to over 80
hours
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 for females.
Furthermore
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, the most significant difference in work time between the two genders is in 60-80
hours
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.
To begin
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 with, the percentage of men who work for 30-50
hours
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 a week is 45%,
whereas
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 that of women is 35%.
In addition
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, 30-50
hours
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 is dominant in
this
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 category. In terms of 60-80 working
hours
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, the proportion of men is 30%, as opposed to that of women, which is just under 20%.
Moreover
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, the percentage of female workers, who spent 10-20 sixty-minute periods a week, is almost twice as more that of males.
However
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, the figure of male employers who worked a maximum of 10
hours
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 per seven-day period is triple as less than that of female workers, at 5% and 15%, respectively. The same figure is seen in over 80 working
hours
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, with the percentage of both genders being 10% in Australia.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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