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The development of tourism contributed to English becoming the most prominent language in the world. Some people think this will lead to English becoming the only language to be spoken globally What are the advantages and disadvantages to having one language in the world?

As English is considered to be an international
language
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, growing rates of
turism
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tourism
 spread
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language
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 even more, causing its dominance and
extinction
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the extinction
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 of other languages.
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occurance
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occurrence
 can end with only
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language
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 in the
world
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, which can be advantageous by removing
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language
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the language
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 barrier, but can
also
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 result in
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the loss
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 of national identities. On the
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 hand, with
one
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language
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, people around the
world
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 will communicate without obstacles.
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 ideas are accessible only
for
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 ones
that
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who
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 know the
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on
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in
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 which they are conveyed, interaction in the same
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 will remove
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 problem and create more opportunities to study, create relations and
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 develop society. Invention of the internet provided uninterrupted connection between any
poin
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point
 on earth and turned the
world
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 upside down, so
united
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a united
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language
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 will push
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 even
further
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.
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, because other languages will no longer exist, nations will begin to disappear as well.
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 is the base of
nation
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a nation
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, as it is deeply interconnected with customs, views and mentalities of the folk. When it is forgotten and
substituded
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substituted
 with another
language
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, the new
one
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 will not fit in the nation’s culture and will start to change and ruin it
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.
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, a long
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history
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, unique traditions and diversity in the
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 will vanish, leading humankind to degradation.
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,
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language
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 in use,
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 as
Engligh
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English
, can strengthen connections between people and open new opportunities but destroy nations and cultures.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and make it consistent throughout the essay.
coherence
Use clearer transitions between ideas and paragraphs to improve the flow of the essay.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your points about advantages and disadvantages.
task achievement
You present a clear discussion of the advantages and disadvantages of having one global language.
coherence
Your essay has a logical structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prominent
  • Contribute
  • Global
  • Advantages
  • Disadvantages
  • Communication
  • Understanding
  • Ease
  • Business
  • Trade
  • Cultural exchange
  • Unity
  • Access
  • Information
  • Simplify
  • Travel
  • Tourism
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