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The line graph shows visits to and from the Uk from 1979 to 1999, and the bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Gia Linh

The line graph shows visits to and from the Uk from 1979 to 1999, and the bar chart shows the most popular countries visited by UK residents in 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Gia Linh
The line graph illustrates the trends in international travel to and from the
UK
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 between 1979 and 1999,
while
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 the bar chart displays the top five destinations - namely Turkey, Greece, the USA, Spain, and
France
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 - visited by
UK
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residents
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 in 1999.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that in 1999, both the
number
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 of
UK
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residents
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 travelling abroad and overseas
visitors
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 coming to the
UK
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 reached their highest point.
In addition
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, in 1999,
France
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 was the most popular destination among
UK
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 travellers. In 1979, around 12
million
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UK
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residents
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 travelled abroad,
while
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 about 10
million
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 foreigners visited the
UK
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. Over the next two decades, the
number
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 of travellers increased sharply, reaching just over 50
million
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 in 1999.
In contrast
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, the
number
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 of international
visitors
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 rose more gradually, climbing to nearly 30
million
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 in the same year.
According to
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 the bar chart,
France
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 was the top destination among
UK
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residents
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 in 1999, with well over 10
million
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 visits. Spain was the second most visited country, with just under 10
million
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visitors
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.
However
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, there is a significant difference between the
number
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 of visits to the USA, Greece and Turkey and the figures for
France
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 and Spain. Those three countries had under 5
million
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UK
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visitors
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 in 1999.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, france, residents, number, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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