In many countries, young people leave their homes in rural areas to move to cities for work or study What do you think are the reasons for this? Do you think advantages of moving to cities outweigh disadvantages

In more recent times, migration from rural
areas
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to
cities
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have
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increased to much
extend
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. There are many particular reasons behind
ecah
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each
migrant who moves to achieve better living standards and to develop
career
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a career
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.
Although
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those
people
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get their desired work or living standard, it comes up with more negative
development
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towards rural
areas
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. Moving forward to reasons,
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my perspective, the most important and common reason behind the decision
of moving
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to move
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is career
development
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. As seen in the rural
areas
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, there is
lack
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a lack
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of colleges and work offices where
toung
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young
people
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want to
proceed
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pursue
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their
interest
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interests
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.
Furthermore
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,
cities
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displayed
a
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image of
people
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's future dreams being fulfilled.
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this
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, young
people
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always have a hope in their eyes that they can improve their
and
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own and
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their beloved
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people
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people's
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living standard. Again, they achieved it with a good job
that is
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available in
cities
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.
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, a person living in
village
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a village
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has a great interest in
medical
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the medical
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field
but
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, but
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his homeplace does not have any medical college
and
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or
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hospital.
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, he would prefer to move to
city
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a city
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where he can study in his
interested
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apply
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field and afterwards start working.
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this
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movement of
people
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giving
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gives
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advantage to young
people
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,
on the other hand
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, it is not much beneficial
dor
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for
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development
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the development
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of rural
areas
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.
Due to
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this
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, the village or countryside
areas
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are being
in
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left in
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that underdeveloped state that they
are living
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were
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before.
Cities
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are getting more investments
due to
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the growing migrants.
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this
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, the overpopulated
cities
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are hard to manage by
government
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the government
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.
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example,
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these
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there
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are some villages still found
which
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that
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does
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do
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not have any school,
this
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is because young
people
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are moving to
cities
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for
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to
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study
and
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, and
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government
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the government
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believed
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it
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is as
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as
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waste of investment where no one
want
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wants
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to study. In conclusion, it is seen that youth are moving to urban
areas
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for
better
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a better
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future
but
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, but
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it seems unfair to rural
development
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.
Additionally
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,
cities
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are getting overpopulated
due to
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this
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.
Therefore
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, there should be more investments in villages for schools and work offices to equally
maintains
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maintain
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the
development
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of countries.

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language
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structure
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content
You have identified important reasons why young people move to cities, such as career development and better living standards.
support
Your examples are relevant and provide a good illustration of your points, like the medical field example.

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